Year 6 · SPaG · Summer: After the test: redrafting
Year 6 redrafting paragraphs worksheet and PowerPoint
To improve a paragraph by putting sentences in order, removing irrelevant ones, linking ideas and cutting repetition.
Improving a paragraph
When you redraft a paragraph, check: are the sentences in a logical order? Do they all belong? Are the ideas linked? Is anything repeated?
| order | put the sentences in a sensible sequence |
|---|---|
| relevance | remove a sentence that is not about the main idea |
| links | add linking adverbials between ideas |
| repetition | replace repeated nouns with pronouns |
Examples
- Penguins live in cold places. They have thick feathers. ~~My brother likes football.~~
- We spent the morning on the beach. Later that afternoon, the tide began to come in.
Key words
- redraft
- to rewrite to improve
- relevant
- connected to the topic
- cohesive
- linked so it reads smoothly
- logical
- in an order that makes sense
What is on the worksheet
Every sheet for this lesson has a short teaching box and 12 questions that get gradually harder: 8 fluency questions, then 4 reasoning questions that ask pupils to explain or choose. A writing challenge follows. The questions use the same styles as the key stage 2 grammar and punctuation test (circle, underline, tick, fill the gap, add punctuation, rewrite, explain). They are written for this website, not copied from past papers.
All the answers are on the last page of the same editable Word file. New questions are made every time, so you can print a different sheet for every group or for homework. The same sheet code always gives the same sheet.
Writing challenge: Redraft a paragraph from your own writing. Move any sentence that is in the wrong place, remove any that does not belong, and add at least two linking words.
Pupil target: I can improve a paragraph.
The PowerPoint
A 20-slide lesson deck for the same lesson: a starter that revisits earlier learning, key words, an I do and a You do question on each slide with a countdown timer, answers that appear one click at a time, and a challenge. Download the redrafting paragraphs PowerPoint.
Where this lesson fits
This is lesson 72 of 72 in the Year 6 SPaG scheme, in the Summer term, block “After the test: redrafting”. It is taught after the SATs grammar test in May, as a writing skill the test does not ask.
Other lessons in this block
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